Cion Blog #4

Toloki

Born March 8th, 1964 recently died on November 16th, 2017.  Toloki, a native South African, came to Athens to fulfill his duties as a professional mourner. He died in severe car accident when a drunk driver hit him head on. He left behind a wife, Orpah, and their son and daughter. His son and daughter are to carry on the profession of mourning with their mother. All have tear drop tattoos to reflect that they are in mourning for Toloki. He will be missed.

Discourse Communities

The discourse communities I am part of are athlete, American, poet, musician, part of Cogar family, lover, friend, Italian, college student, laid back, beach bum.

POET:

This community is to put words together in a way that's creative,

Words that can rhyme and words that don't rhyme but joy is what they give.

The genre's that are used are can be happiness, joy, hatred, and pain,

Either way emotions are being spread all the same.

Poetry can be used to let people know how you're feeling or to relieve stress. To become a member of this group all you have to do is write some poems that people like and enjoy or criticize and hate.

ATHLETE:

Someone who plays a sport. You don't have to be the best, you can be the worst but as long as you're having fun then you're an athlete. Athletes can be a person on a team in sports like hockey, football, basketball, etc. Or a person who plays solo sports like golf, tennis, or ping pong. To become a member of this community, just start playing a sport on a team or a solo sport.

PART OF THE COGAR FAMILY:

Someone that has a fun time. Respectable, fun, exciting, interesting. Cogars like to be loud and always have a fun time. Close together and love to recite lines from the movie Tombstone.  Love to have family parties and really caring for each other. To become a member of this group you must be born a Cogar or married to a member of it.

Cion #2

He stood in the corner of the room alone, minding his own business. He wore black clothing and had long hair. He wore a hat backwards. His coat was yellow and gray and he was tall and skinny. He had a larger shorter man next to him. He had a go-tee and smoked a cigarette. The tall one referred to him as Lunchbox or Silent Bob. Every time a girl walked by the tall one conjured himself to shout his name and various phrases, "Hey momma what's up I'm Jay and this is heterolifemate Silent Bob." 

They stood there doing nothing but talking about random things. But every time the tall one, Jay, talked, he conjured up ways to make himself look like a fool and an idiot. But it was hilarious.

Essay 2 Topic

My topic will be the war on drugs

Thesis

A woman is judged tougher than a man and it is a proven fact.

Cion #1

It was a ritual that has been around for centuries. People did nothing when the day came every week. I witnessed it for the first time when I was a small boy. People would gather together in unison despite who they were or what they did to participate in the ritual. 

At my first ritual I noticed what everyone was wearing the same clothing colors with a name on the front. We all gathered around this box with a men talking. Everyone eager and shouting wanting it to start. My father held me in his lap as we watched, waiting for it to begin. I watched and noticed that the thing they played in look like the Colosseum that the gladiators fought in. I asked my dad if there was going to be a fight. He looked at me and answered yes son, today we will kill those punks from Pittsburgh. I turned to the box with a look of eagerness ready to watch the battle. 

It began. Loud music and cheers filled the Colosseum shaped building. Men ran out in yellow and black clothes and were being scowled by the spectators who wore some type of brown shirts like I was wearing. My uncle began cursing at the men. My dad shouted boos. I joined in not knowing why but thought it would be fun and it was. Yet I didn't know why I was yelling at the box. But then it got quiet. The people at my house hushed for the moment. Then cheers of enjoyment and excitement as men in brown shirts and orange helmets ran into the Colosseum building onto the green surface that had a light amount of snow. I heard the cheers from everyone at my house so I began to cheer.

I watched in amazement as a this lemon shaped, brown thing flew through the air and was caught by a man in the brown shirt. He began to run with it as the spectators cheered and shouted GO! GO! I began shouting the same thing. He ran past numbers on the ground that were in multiples of 10. He was attacked at the one marked 40 by men in the white and yellow clothes. The event went on with hitting and running and these things called touchdowns. At the end of the battle the final score was Browns 28, Steelers 24. I asked my dad if we won the fight. He looked at me and smiled and said yes.

Ever since then I haven't missed a ritual. Every sunday I put on my brown shirt and sit in front of the television to participate in a great ritual. I will never forget my first time I took place in one the greatest ritual I have ever seen. Go Browns.

Essay 1 Pre-Write

I will start out by saying that both essays have valid points. But I'm choosing to write about Deborah Tannen's essay There is No Unmarked Woman". I decided to write about this essay because it's the easiest to write about. Ha-ha, I'm just kidding. Seriously, she makes remarks about the women at the conference and their appearance. I felt that as I read I started to agree with what she had to say. Women and men are looked at differently in the world by both sexes. 

Why is it that no matter how we appear we are judged daily on it by others in the work place? Everywhere we go people judge us as if we are on trial or something. Tannen judges the women and men at the conference and she goes into a well thought out process of how we are judged differently.

Tannen says it's we are noticed. But men and women are noticed in different ways. She points out that women are judged based on whether or not they choose to use Miss, Mrs, or Ms. or choose to take their husband's last name. Each tells something about the way they are addressed. With keeping their last name people see the woman as independent and not in need of a male for support. With taking the last name of the husband to some people they feel that the woman can't support herself. By support I don't mean by financially, but as a person. 

Tannen sort of gives a man's point of view in the essay but not that well. As men she tells that we only notice a women for how they dress. Well looks can be deceiving to some, I feel. But yet men do judge women for how they look. We see a women wearing skimpy clothes and the first thought that pops up is she is a, excuse my word chose, a slut. Before we even get to know her she is "marked". Just like Tannen says in her essay that women are "marked".

I agree with what Tannen has to say. She uses details and facts to prove her point that women are "marked". Since I'm male I have judged a female on the way she looks because of how she chooses to dress. But I tend to change my opinion after learning about them. At my high school I was a victim of judging all because I marked women for their looks. 

Tannen Essay

Tannen Essay

1) Tannen's background is she was born in 1946 and is a professor of linguistics at Georgetown University. Her essay There is No Unmarked Woman was not found for where it was originally published.

2) Her Thesis for the essay is that a woman is never unmarked. She addresses that we speak with our clothes and looks instead of with our mouths. 

3) The term "marked" is the way language alters the base meaning of a world by adding a linguistic particle that has no meaning on its own. She uses it in her argument by noticing the women in the conference and how they are dressed, groomed and how they appear everyday at the office. She also states that the men don't have to dress up everyday in fancy clothes except wear a plain suit. But the women dress up so they are noticed. Therefore they are marked.

4) Tannen says that women are marked by their outfits, make up, hair style, and basically looks.

5) She says that men see it as a hostile refusal to please them.

6) The point Tannen is making is that Fasold stresses that language and culture are particularly unfair in treating women as the marked case because biologically it is the male that is marked. Fasold talks about the pronouns "he" and "she" is used differently. He tells that "he" means "he or she" and that "she" is used only if the referent is specifically female.

7) According to Tannen, with her writing this essay marks her not as a writer, not as a linguist, not as an analyst of human behavior, but as a feminist.

8) She concludes it as a Delayed Thesis by stating the thesis at the end of the essay.

Blog Post #1- A&B Ch. 1-2

Hotspot 1

On page 5 in Chapter 1 of A&B, the statement that is presented by Ramage, Bean, and Johnson "However, instead of focusing on rules, we would like to begin by giving you a broader and deeper way to look at writing.." Basically they're saying that writing rhetorically doesn't have any rules, but writers write to prose questions or appeal to an audience. A writer who is good can be question askers and problem prosers. This hotspot I chose because it opens up my mind to think and write what I feel while not worrying about rules that will effect what I have to say.

Hotspot 2

In "A Letter to the Editor"  by David Rockwood, he argues that wind power "is based on fantasy rather than fact." He disagrees that setting up wind power to generate electricity would be a bad idea. I agree with his argument because Rockwood states in the second paragraph "wind energy would be unavailable - either in no wind situations or in severe blizzard conditions, which would shut down the generators." I agree, with putting the generators in the mountains by Oregon or Washington, would create problems with the area. The generators are going to take up too much room, they are 100-200 feet tall, and would be costly. The generators with the big props also kill the birds, just a side note.

Hotspot 3

Chapter 2 page 32-33 discusses the concept of freewriting. Freewriting is "nonstop writing or sustained writing" where you write whatever about whatever. Basically you just put your pen to a piece of paper and write about the first thing that comes to your mind. "Many freewriters find themselves running out of ideas in 3-5 minutes, but if this happens just sit there and write over and over I'm stuck or this is stupid until you get an idea." I have to agree with what they're saying. Sometimes freewriting can get you a good story or just a laugh.

Hotspot 4

Concept 6 on page 41 in Chapter 2 talks about a strong thesis statement surprises readers with something new or challenging. "Thus a strong usually contains an element of uncertainty, risk, or challenge." A strong thesis statement lets the reader know what to expect in the paper. A reader can already tell that they are going to like or dislike the topic of the paper by the thesis statement.